作者：诸立忠
On Spring Festival I go to see my uncle. His family lives in a village. I live there for two days.
The second day my cousin says, "Let's climb Zhuizi Hill here." I'm glad to hear that. Zhuizi Hill is not far from my uncle's village. It is a fine day. At seven thirty my cousin and I start. We also bring something nice to eat and drink.
On the way we sing songs happily on our bikes. It takes us about half an hour to get to the foot of the hill. People call it Zhuizi Hill because it looks like an awl (锥子). There are many trees and flowers on the hill. Many birds are singing in the trees. And there is a small river at the foot of the hill. I am very glad to see all of these. We put our bikes under a big tree and start to climb the hill. It is not easy to climb the hill. But we all enjoy it. Then I see a hole on the hill. My cousin tells me its name is Xianrendong. It is very large."It's a good place for us to have a picnic." I say to my cousin. So we go into the hole to cook our lunch. I never have a meal outside. I think it's very delicious. I feel very happy!
When we get home in the afternoon, we are so tired. But we are very happy. We really have a happy day.
总评:文章重点叙述了小作者在春节期间与堂弟一起爬山的过程,说明详略得当,重点突出,句型使用正确,用词错误较少,是一篇较好的习作。